Corrects and cleans up descriptions on some clothing items. (CleverRa…

…ven#49928) * Cleans up some clothing descriptions. * Update torso_clothes.json * Fixes (hopefully) spacing issues. * Update legs_armor.json * Apply suggestions from code review Thanks for editing this, actual-nh! Co-authored-by: actual-nh <[email protected]> * Update data/json/items/armor/suits_protection.json Co-authored-by: actual-nh <[email protected]> Co-authored-by: actual-nh <[email protected]> Co-authored-by: Kevin Granade <[email protected]>
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diff --git a/data/json/items/armor/boots.json b/data/json/items/armor/boots.json
@@ -21,7 +21,7 @@
     "id": "boots",
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "name": { "str": "pair of boots", "str_pl": "pairs of boots" },
-    "description": "Tough leather boots.  Very durable.",
+    "description": "Tough leather boots, for tough everyday work.",
     "weight": "1060 g",
     "volume": "2500 ml",
     "price": 10000,
@@ -51,7 +51,7 @@
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "category": "armor",
     "name": { "str": "pair of occult boots", "str_pl": "pairs of occult boots" },
-    "description": "Leather boots covered with tiny finely carved bones.  With each step the bones collide with each other producing a melodic clicking",
+    "description": "Leather boots covered with tiny, finely-carved bones.  With each step, the bones collide with each other producing a melodic clicking.",
     "weight": "1824 g",
     "volume": "4250 ml",
     "price": 13500,
@@ -71,7 +71,7 @@
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "category": "armor",
     "name": { "str": "pair of turnout boots", "str_pl": "pairs of turnout boots" },
-    "description": "A pair of steel-toed rubber boots, the sort worn by firefighters.  Highly resistant to heat and flame, they provide excellent protection from injury.",
+    "description": "A pair of steel-toed rubber boots, the sort worn by firefighters.",
     "weight": "1930 g",
     "volume": "3500 ml",
     "price": 13000,
@@ -92,7 +92,7 @@
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "category": "armor",
     "name": { "str": "pair of chitinous boots", "str_pl": "pairs of chitinous boots" },
-    "description": "Boots made from the exoskeletons of insects.  Light and durable.",
+    "description": "Boots made from the exoskeletons of insects.",
     "weight": "1620 g",
     "volume": "4250 ml",
     "price": 13500,
@@ -122,7 +122,7 @@
     "copy-from": "boots_chitin",
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "name": { "str": "pair of biosilicified chitin boots", "str_pl": "pairs of biosilicified chitin boots" },
-    "description": "Boots crafted from carefully cleaned and pruned biosilicified exoskeletons of acidic ants.  Acid-resistant and very durable.",
+    "description": "Boots crafted from carefully cleaned and pruned biosilicified exoskeletons of acidic ants.",
     "price_postapoc": 1750,
     "material": [ "acidchitin" ],
     "proportional": { "weight": 1.125, "volume": 1.13, "price": 1.25, "encumbrance": 1.5, "warmth": 1.5 },
@@ -164,7 +164,7 @@
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "category": "armor",
     "name": { "str": "pair of EOD foot protectors", "str_pl": "pairs of EOD foot protectors" },
-    "description": "Armored foot protectors constructed from steel and nomex for explosive ordnance disposal.  They are designed to protect against overpressure, fragmentation, impact and heat.",
+    "description": "Armored foot protectors constructed from steel and nomex for use by explosive ordnance disposal technicians.",
     "weight": "1220 g",
     "volume": "3 L",
     "price": 50000,
@@ -201,7 +201,7 @@
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "category": "armor",
     "name": { "str": "pair of survivor fireboots", "str_pl": "pairs of survivor fireboots" },
-    "description": "A pair of customized, Kevlar armored Nomex boots, modified to provide maximum protection from harm and the elements, even when knee-deep in the dead.",
+    "description": "A pair of customized, Kevlar-armored Nomex boots.  These will keep you alive, even when knee-deep in the flames.",
     "weight": "1980 g",
     "volume": "3 L",
     "price": 24000,
@@ -259,7 +259,7 @@
     "id": "boots_wsurvivor_nofur",
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "name": { "str": "pair of faux fur winter survivor boots", "str_pl": "pairs of faux fur winter survivor boots" },
-    "description": "A pair of customized, Kevlar armored faux fur boots, modified to provide maximum protection from harm and the elements, even when knee-deep in the dead.  While not quite as warm as real fur it's pretty good.",
+    "description": "A pair of customized, Kevlar-armored boots.  Warm thanks to a faux-fur lining, these will keep you alive even when knee-deep in the dead.",
     "copy-from": "boots_wsurvivor",
     "material": [ "kevlar", "faux_fur" ],
     "symbol": "[",
@@ -273,7 +273,7 @@
     "name": { "str": "pair of XL faux fur winter survivor boots", "str_pl": "pairs of XL faux fur winter survivor boots" },
     "copy-from": "boots_wsurvivor",
     "material": [ "kevlar", "faux_fur" ],
-    "description": "A pair of customized and oversized, Kevlar armored faux fur boots, modified to provide maximum protection from harm and the elements, even when knee-deep in the dead.  While not quite as warm as real fur it's pretty good.",
+    "description": "A pair of customized and oversized Kevlar-armored boots.  Warm thanks to a faux-fur lining, these will keep you alive even when knee-deep in the dead.",
     "color": "pink",
     "warmth": 50,
     "proportional": { "weight": 1.3, "volume": 1.3 },
@@ -284,7 +284,7 @@
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "category": "armor",
     "name": { "str": "pair of survivor wetsuit boots", "str_pl": "pairs of survivor wetsuit boots" },
-    "description": "A pair of customized, Kevlar armored neoprene boots, modified to provide maximum protection from harm and the elements, even when knee-deep in the dead.",
+    "description": "A pair of customized, Kevlar-armored neoprene boots.  These will keep you dry and alive, come hell or high water.",
     "weight": "1180 g",
     "volume": "1500 ml",
     "price": 24000,
@@ -306,7 +306,7 @@
     "repairs_like": "boots_larmor",
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "name": { "str": "pair of hiking boots", "str_pl": "pairs of hiking boots" },
-    "description": "Tough yet light leather boots.  Durable and comfortable.",
+    "description": "Tough yet light leather boots, intended for outdoor activity.",
     "weight": "960 g",
     "volume": "2 L",
     "price": 14000,
@@ -328,7 +328,7 @@
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "category": "armor",
     "name": { "str": "pair of heavy survivor boots", "str_pl": "pairs of heavy survivor boots" },
-    "description": "A pair of customized Kevlar boots, heavily armored with steel and modified to provide maximum protection from harm, even when knee-deep in the dead.",
+    "description": "A pair of customized Kevlar boots that are heavily armored with steel.  Favoring protection over comfort, these will keep you alive, especially when knee-deep in the dead.",
     "weight": "2254 g",
     "volume": "3 L",
     "price": 24000,
@@ -358,7 +358,7 @@
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "category": "armor",
     "name": { "str": "pair of leather armor boots", "str_pl": "pairs of leather armor boots" },
-    "description": "Thick leather boots made specifically to protect the feet.  Light and tough.",
+    "description": "Thick leather boots made specifically to protect the feet.  Light yet tough.",
     "weight": "902 g",
     "volume": "2 L",
     "price": 12500,
@@ -388,7 +388,7 @@
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "category": "armor",
     "name": { "str": "pair of light survivor boots", "str_pl": "pairs of light survivor boots" },
-    "description": "A pair of customized, Kevlar armored cloth boots, modified to provide maximum protection from harm, even when knee-deep in the dead.",
+    "description": "A pair of customized, Kevlar-armored cloth boots.  Favoring comfort over protection, these boots will keep you moving and agile, even when knee-deep in the dead.",
     "weight": "1120 g",
     "volume": "2 L",
     "price": 24000,
@@ -499,7 +499,7 @@
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "category": "armor",
     "name": { "str": "pair of steeltoed boots", "str_pl": "pairs of steeltoed boots" },
-    "description": "Leather boots with a steel toe.  Extremely durable.",
+    "description": "Leather boots with a steel toe, intended for use by workers.",
     "weight": "1320 g",
     "volume": "3 L",
     "price": 12000,
@@ -521,7 +521,7 @@
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "category": "armor",
     "name": { "str": "pair of survivor boots", "str_pl": "pairs of survivor boots" },
-    "description": "A pair of customized leather boots, armored with Kevlar and modified to provide maximum protection from harm, even when knee-deep in the dead.",
+    "description": "A pair of customized leather boots armored with Kevlar.  Balancing comfort and protection, these boots will keep you alive, even when knee-deep in the dead.",
     "weight": "1330 g",
     "volume": "2500 ml",
     "price": 24000,
@@ -543,7 +543,7 @@
     "copy-from": "boots",
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "name": { "str": "pair of western boots", "str_pl": "pairs of western boots" },
-    "description": "Stiff leather boots with intricate embroidery and one-inch heels.  They look good, but aren't made for running.  Each boot is large enough to conceal a small holdout pistol.",
+    "description": "Stiff leather boots with intricate embroidery and one-inch heels.  These may look good, but these boots are made for walking.  Each boot is large enough to conceal a small holdout pistol.",
     "price_postapoc": 750,
     "proportional": { "weight": 1.2, "volume": 1.2, "price": 2, "encumbrance": 2 },
     "pocket_data": [
@@ -558,7 +558,7 @@
     "id": "boots_winter",
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "name": { "str": "pair of winter boots", "str_pl": "pairs of winter boots" },
-    "description": "Cumbersome boots designed for warmth.",
+    "description": "Wool-lined boots designed for warmth.",
     "weight": "1640 g",
     "volume": "3500 ml",
     "price": 7000,
@@ -587,7 +587,7 @@
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "category": "armor",
     "name": { "str": "pair of winter survivor boots", "str_pl": "pairs of winter survivor boots" },
-    "description": "A pair of customized, Kevlar armored fur boots, modified to provide maximum protection from harm and the elements, even when knee-deep in the dead.",
+    "description": "A pair of customized, Kevlar-armored boots.  Warm thanks to the real fur lining, these will keep you alive, even when knee-deep in the dead.",
     "weight": "1760 g",
     "volume": "3500 ml",
     "price": 24000,
@@ -617,7 +617,7 @@
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "category": "armor",
     "name": { "str": "pair of XL survivor boots", "str_pl": "pairs of XL survivor boots" },
-    "description": "A massive pair of customized leather boots, armored with Kevlar and modified to provide maximum protection from harm and the elements, even when knee-deep in the dead.",
+    "description": "A massive pair of customized leather boots armored with Kevlar.  Balancing comfort and protection, these boots will keep you alive even when knee-deep in the dead.",
     "weight": "2460 g",
     "volume": "5 L",
     "price": 24000,
@@ -913,7 +913,7 @@
     "repairs_like": "boots_larmor",
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "name": { "str": "pair of knee-high boots", "str_pl": "pairs of knee-high boots" },
-    "description": "Very long leather boots that cover the lower legs.  Difficult to wear but extremely durable.",
+    "description": "Very long leather boots that cover the lower legs, these are difficult to wear.",
     "weight": "1520 g",
     "volume": "3750 ml",
     "price": 8000,
@@ -1167,7 +1167,7 @@
     "repairs_like": "boots_larmor",
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "name": { "str": "pair of thigh-high boots", "str_pl": "pairs of thigh-high boots" },
-    "description": "Very long leather boots that reach past the knees.  Difficult to wear but extremely durable.",
+    "description": "Very long leather boots that reach past the knees, these are difficult to wear.",
     "weight": "1540 g",
     "volume": "4250 ml",
     "price": 8000,
@@ -1290,7 +1290,7 @@
     "id": "nomex_socks",
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "name": { "str": "pair of flame-resistant socks", "str_pl": "pairs of flame-resistant socks" },
-    "description": "A snug fitting pair of stockings made from thin and lightweight Nomex fire-resistant fabric.  Tough yet breathable, they are light and comfortable to wear under clothing.",
+    "description": "A snug-fitting pair of stockings made from thin and lightweight Nomex fabric.",
     "weight": "200 g",
     "volume": "750 ml",
     "price": 2000,
@@ -1310,7 +1310,7 @@
     "id": "xlnomex_socks",
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "name": { "str": "pair of XL flame-resistant socks", "str_pl": "pairs of XL flame-resistant socks" },
-    "description": "A snug fitting pair of stockings made from thin and lightweight Nomex fire-resistant fabric.  Tough yet breathable, they are light and comfortable to wear under clothing.",
+    "description": "A snug-fitting pair of stockings made from thin and lightweight Nomex fabric.",
     "weight": "300 g",
     "volume": "1000 ml",
     "copy-from": "nomex_socks",
@@ -1348,7 +1348,7 @@
     "id": "socks_ankle",
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "name": { "str": "pair of ankle socks", "str_pl": "pairs of ankle socks" },
-    "description": "Short socks, commonly used for sports.  These are designed to protect your feet from friction, not temperature",
+    "description": "Short socks, commonly used for sports.  These are designed to protect your feet from friction, not temperature.",
     "weight": "25 g",
     "volume": "200 ml",
     "price": 100,
@@ -1418,7 +1418,7 @@
     "id": "xlsocks_wool",
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "name": { "str": "pair of XL wool socks", "str_pl": "pairs of XL wool socks" },
-    "description": "Warm socks made of wool for a larger than you'd previously thought possible human.",
+    "description": "Warm socks made of wool for a human larger than previously thought possible.",
     "weight": "77 g",
     "volume": "500 ml",
     "copy-from": "socks_wool",

diff --git a/data/json/items/armor/cloaks.json b/data/json/items/armor/cloaks.json
@@ -131,7 +131,7 @@
     "repairs_like": "cloak",
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "name": { "str": "Jedi cloak" },
-    "description": "Long, flowing robes.  Simple and comfortable to wear.  Be sure to tear it off dramatically before fighting any foes!",
+    "description": "Long, flowing robes.  Be sure to tear them off dramatically before fighting any foes!",
     "weight": "1587 g",
     "volume": "2500 ml",
     "price": 22500,
@@ -204,7 +204,7 @@
     "id": "poncho",
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "name": { "str": "wool poncho" },
-    "description": "A simple wool garment worn over the torso.  Provides a bit of protection.",
+    "description": "A simple wool garment worn over the torso.",
     "weight": "907 g",
     "volume": "1250 ml",
     "price": 12000,

diff --git a/data/json/items/armor/coats.json b/data/json/items/armor/coats.json
@@ -5,7 +5,7 @@
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "category": "armor",
     "name": { "str": "turnout coat" },
-    "description": "A heavy protective coat worn by firefighters.  Highly resistant to heat and flame, it provides excellent protection from injury.",
+    "description": "A heavy protective coat worn by firefighters, highly resistant to heat and flame.",
     "weight": "1930 g",
     "volume": "5 L",
     "price": 91000,
@@ -227,7 +227,7 @@
     "id": "coat_rain",
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "name": { "str": "rain coat" },
-    "description": "A plastic coat with a hood and two very large pockets.  Provides protection from rain.",
+    "description": "A plastic coat with a hood and two very large pockets, meant to provide protection from rain.",
     "weight": "960 g",
     "volume": "1750 ml",
     "price": 7900,
@@ -888,7 +888,7 @@
     "repairs_like": "trenchcoat",
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "name": { "str": "chef's jacket" },
-    "description": "This double-breasted uniform is unusually thick to protect against the heat of the kitchen.",
+    "description": "This double-breasted uniform is to protect against the heat of the kitchen.",
     "weight": "720 g",
     "volume": "1750 ml",
     "price": 7000,
@@ -957,7 +957,7 @@
     "repairs_like": "trenchcoat",
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "name": { "str": "flannel jacket" },
-    "description": "A jacket made from flannel-style denim, favored by outdoorsy types.  Provides decent protection from cuts.",
+    "description": "A jacket made from flannel-style denim, favored by outdoorsy types.",
     "weight": "958 g",
     "volume": "4250 ml",
     "price": 6000,
@@ -995,7 +995,7 @@
     "repairs_like": "trenchcoat",
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "name": { "str": "jean jacket" },
-    "description": "A jacket made from denim.  Provides decent protection from cuts.",
+    "description": "A jacket made from denim.",
     "weight": "800 g",
     "volume": "3250 ml",
     "price": 4000,
@@ -1029,7 +1029,7 @@
     "snippet_category": [
       {
         "id": "patched",
-        "text": "A jacket made from denim.  Provides decent protection from cuts.  This one is haphazardly covered with patches featuring metal band logos."
+        "text": "A jacket made from denim.  This one is haphazardly covered with patches featuring metal band logos."
       }
     ],
     "flags": [ "VARSIZE", "POCKETS", "OUTER" ]
@@ -1038,7 +1038,7 @@
     "id": "jacket_leather",
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "name": { "str": "leather jacket" },
-    "description": "A jacket made from thick leather.  Cumbersome, but offers excellent protection from cuts.",
+    "description": "A jacket made from thick leather.  Offers more protection than your average jacket.",
     "weight": "1450 g",
     "volume": "4500 ml",
     "price": 17900,
@@ -1204,7 +1204,7 @@
     "repairs_like": "trenchcoat",
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "name": { "str": "judo gi" },
-    "description": "Plain white judo gi.  Thick and a little stiff, it gives minor protection from cuts and punches.",
+    "description": "Plain white judo gi.",
     "weight": "1000 g",
     "volume": "1500 ml",
     "price": 5000,
@@ -1223,7 +1223,7 @@
     "repairs_like": "trenchcoat",
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "name": { "str": "karate gi" },
-    "description": "Plain white karate gi.  Loose and flowing, it offers little protection, and little encumbrance.",
+    "description": "Plain white karate gi.  Made from loose and flowing cotton.",
     "weight": "400 g",
     "volume": "1500 ml",
     "price": 5000,
@@ -1403,7 +1403,7 @@
     "id": "peacoat",
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "name": { "str": "peacoat" },
-    "description": "A heavy wool coat.  Cumbersome, but warm and with deep pockets.",
+    "description": "A heavy wool coat, warm and with deep pockets.",
     "weight": "1800 g",
     "volume": "3 L",
     "price": 18000,
@@ -1457,7 +1457,7 @@
     "repairs_like": "trenchcoat",
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "name": { "str": "robe" },
-    "description": "A loose-fitting outer garment with sleeves, and a mysterious amount of well-hidden pockets.",
+    "description": "A loose-fitting outer garment with sleeves and a mysterious amount of well-hidden pockets.",
     "weight": "1000 g",
     "volume": "5 L",
     "price": 5000,
@@ -1525,7 +1525,7 @@
     "repairs_like": "trenchcoat",
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "name": { "str": "samghati" },
-    "description": "A traditional, double layered Buddhist coat, used as an outer cloak for various occasions.",
+    "description": "A traditional, double-layered Buddhist coat.  Used as an outer cloak for various occasions.",
     "weight": "800 g",
     "volume": "2250 ml",
     "price": 6500,
@@ -1998,7 +1998,7 @@
     "repairs_like": "trenchcoat",
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "name": { "str_sp": "thawb" },
-    "description": "A long, loose-fitting robe with wide sleeves, a traditional Arab garment.",
+    "description": "A long, loose-fitting robe with wide sleeves.  A traditional Arab garment.",
     "weight": "1200 g",
     "volume": "4500 ml",
     "price": 10000,
@@ -2318,7 +2318,7 @@
     "repairs_like": "trenchcoat",
     "type": "ARMOR",
     "name": { "str": "army winter jacket" },
-    "description": "A tough hooded jacket with lots of pockets, thickly padded for warmth.  Favored by the military.",
+    "description": "A hooded jacket with lots of pockets, thickly padded for warmth.  Favored by the military.",
     "weight": "1000 g",
     "volume": "3 L",
     "price": 4375,