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@@ -180,167 +180,184 @@ I'm pretty offended to hear her talk about 'involving' me after everything that'
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 -- そりゃ先輩から見れば今までの俺の覚悟なんて甘口カレーパンのようなものだろうけど、それでも、素人ながら決死の覚悟でやってきたのです。
 // This is bread erasure.
-Sure, from her point of view, my resolve must seem as delicate as a piece of sweet curry bun, but an amateur I may be, I showed up ready to die a certain death.
+Sure, from her point of view, my resolve up to this point must seem as soft and yielding as a curry bun,
+ but despite being an amateur I still showed up ready to put my life on the line.
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 -- もうとっくに当事者のつもりだったのです。
-Getting involved has long since been my intention.
+I've considered myself well and truly involved for a while now.
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 -- 後戻りできるくらいなら、あのホテルの後、とっくに逃げ出していたのです。
-If I wanted a way out, I'd have run away far earlier after what happened at the hotel.
+If I wanted a way out, I'd already have taken my chance and run for the hills after what happened at the hotel.
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 -- それなのに、先輩の中では、俺はまだ『守るべき無関係な人々』と同じ位置にいるのが、嬉しい反面、悲しいのです。
-Despite all that, to still be considered by Senpai to be part of the uninvolved people who need protection makes me happy, but also sad.
+Despite my choice to remain, Senpai still doesn't think I'm really involved, and that I need to be protected.
+ That makes me happy, sure, but sad at the same time.
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 -- 「あの……うわ、とはどのような意味でしょうか？
-"Umm... What may the meaning of this 'ugh' be?
+"Um... Can you elaborate on what you mean by 'ugh'?
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 -- それと、とても泣きそうな顔をしているのは……」
-And... You really look like you want to cry..."
+Also... you really look like you're almost about to cry..."
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 -- 「泣きそうだからです。
-"That's because I want to cry.
+"That's because I am about to cry.
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 -- いま、シエル先輩にいじめられたというか、デコピン一つで大気圏まで叩きのめされた気持ちです」
-RIght now, I feel like you're making fun of me, or more exactly, it feels like you've finger-flicked me up to the atmosphere."
+// デコピン much more of a _thing_ in JP, but not sure there's any real important context lost?
+I feel like you're making fun of me.
+ It's like you've sent me flying into space with a single flick of your finger."
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 -- 「え―――いえ、あの、そんなつもりは微塵もない、のですが―――本当に？」
-"Huh―――No, wait, I have no intention to do that―――But, truly?"
+"Huh――No, wait, that wasn't my intention at all――do you mean it?"
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 -- 「……本当に。
-"...Truly.
+"I do.
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 -- あのですね。いまさら、巻き込みたくない、はないです。
-So that you know, right now, I don't want to be not involved.
+Look, you can't go saying you won't 'involve me' at this point.
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 -- 先輩。俺は俺なりに覚悟の上でここまできたんです。散々死ぬような目にあってきたし、これからも危険はあるってわかってます」
-Senpai, I've come this far aware of the dangers, in my own way. I've seen more than enough near-death situations and I understand that the way forward holds many more dangers."
+Senpai,
+ I've come this far because %{i}I%{/i} decided I was going to.
+ I've been through a bunch of near-death experiences,
+ and I'm well aware that the path that lies ahead will be just as dangerous."
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 -- 「その上で、吸血鬼退治をすると決めたんです。だから自分の身ぐらい自分で守れます。
-"I've made the choice to hunt vampires after taking that into account. So, I can protect myself, at the very least.
+"Even knowing that, I've still decided that I'm going to hunt vampires.
+ So if nothing else, I can at least protect myself.
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 -- いや、守れなくてもいい、後悔はしません。だって―――」
-No, even if I can't protect myself, I won't have any regrets. After all―――"
+Actually, even if I can't protect myself, I still won't have any regrets.
+ That's because―――"
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 -- 「だって……だって、なんでしょう？」
-"After all... After all, what?"
+"That's because... what?"
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 -- 「……それぐらいじゃないと、先輩と一緒にいられないじゃないですか。
-"If I don't do at least that, how could I ever be with you, Senpai?
+"Because if I don't, I won't be able to be with you, Senpai.
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 -- 俺はこれからできるかぎりの時間、先輩の隣りで、先輩の力になりたいんです」
-From now on, Senpai, I want to stand alongside you, I want to be here for you as much as I can."
+From now on, I want to spend as much time as I can by your side.
+ I want to be someone you can lean on."
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 -- 自分でも意識していなかった本音がこぼれてしまった。
-I end up voicing what I truly felt, something that I haven't even been aware of.
+I end up giving voice to my true feelings, ones not even I myself was aware of.
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 -- ……でも、そうか。
-Hmm... I see.
+Still... I get it now.
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 -- それなら納得できる。俺が吸血鬼の世界に踏みとどまっていたのは、街の為だけじゃない。
-I understand now. I didn't keep a foot in the world of vampires for the sake of the city.
+If that's the way I feel, it all makes sense.
+ I didn't stick around in the world of vampires just for the sake of this city.
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 -- この人と一緒にいたいから、これまで逃げずにいられたんだ。
-I was able to stay without running away because I want to be with her.
+I've been able to resist the urge to run away all this time because I wanted to be with her.
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 -- 「……もう。そんなの、わたしが後悔しちゃいますよ。
-"Gosh... You'll make me have second thoughts.
+"Geez... If you carry on like that, I'll end up having second thoughts.
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 -- だいたいですね、自分の身は守れない、なんて、なにを根拠に言ってるんですか。
-And in the first place, what are you even basing yourself on to say that you can't protect yourself?
+Also, what on earth is your reasoning for saying that you can't protect yourself?
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 -- 遠野くんの運動神経は優れていますし、その眼の事も分かっています。貧血がちなのは欠点ですが、運動能力そのものは信頼に値します」
-Your reflexes are excellent, and you also have your eyes. Having anemia is a weak point, but your physical abilities per se are worthy of being relied upon."
+Your reflexes are excellent, and you also have your eyes.
+ Having anemia may count against you, but your overall athletic ability seems rather respectable."
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 -- 「貴方が本気で自分の身だけを考えてくれるなら、わたしもこんなに目くじらを立てたりはしませんよ」
-"If you did me the favor of looking after yourself seriously, I wouldn't be here scolding you over trivialities."
+"If you'd only pay a little more attention to your own safety,
+ I wouldn't have to sit here scolding you over trivialities."
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 -- 肩をすくめて、先輩は意外な<意|コ><見|ト>を口にした。
-Senpai unexpectedly says while shrugging her shoulders.
+Senpai shrugs her shoulders as she delivers this surprising opinion.
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 -- 「あれ……そ、そうなんですか？」
-"Ah... I-Is that right?"
+"Huh? Y-You really think so?"
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 -- 毒気を抜かれてしまい、つい聞き返す。
-I find myself asking after having the wind taken out of my sails.
+I'm so taken aback that I automatically try and clarify what she said.
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 -- 「ええ。遠野くん、わたしの部屋に泊まったとき裸になったじゃないですか。贅肉のない引き締まった筋肉で、あの時からキレイな<躯|からだ>しているなぁって思っていたぐらいです」
-"Yes. Remember how you got naked back when you stayed at my place? I've been thinking ever since then that you have a clean-cut and lean body with no excess fat."
+// Literally 3 different women have said basically this exact same thing to him at this point
+"I do.
+ Remember how you stripped down back when you were staying at my place?
+ It struck me then that you have a rather elegant physique, with well-toned muscles and no excess fat."
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 -- 「裸って……俺、裸になんかなってないけど」
-"Naked... But, I didn't get naked?"
+"Stripped...? Uh, I can't say I remember doing that."
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 -- 「忘れちゃったんですか？　遠野くん、お風呂に入るとき台所で着替えてたじゃないですか」
-"Did you forget? You changed clothes in the kitchen before taking a bath, didn't you?"
+"Oh, did you forget?
+ You changed in the kitchen before taking a bath, didn't you?"
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 -- ……そうだった。
-Oh... right.
+Oh yeah...
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 -- そういうコトも、ありました。
-That did happen.
+I guess I did.
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