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script/Ciel/Day 10/10_01_CIEL10_4_2.txt

@@ -68,7 +68,7 @@ I mean, something tells me there's no way Noel-sensei would've been able to pull
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 -- 「先輩が選りすぐりの代行者である事はなんとなく分かります。そもそもあのアルクェイドが敵として意識するぐらいなんだから、教会の中でも一、二を争う吸血鬼ハンターだったりするんですか？」
 "I get the sense that you're the cream of the crop among Executors, Senpai.
- I mean, if Arcueid has acknowledged you as her enemy,
+ If Arcueid has acknowledged you as her enemy,
  you must be basically the best vampire hunter in the whole Church, right?"
 }
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 -- 「そのかわりと言ってはなんですが、わたしの大聖堂には原盤にはない機能が生まれました。
 "Though this doesn't entirely make up for that loss,
- my version of the Cathedral does possess a functionality not present in the original.
+ my version of the Cathedral does possess functionality not present in the original recording.
 }
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@@ -138,7 +138,7 @@ If used properly, it can single-handedly isolate a whole host of Dead Apostles.
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 -- 結界内に閉じこめるには対象を<黒鍵|こっけん>で囲む必要がありますし、大聖堂のような大魔術は連発できないんです。
 You need to surround a target with Black Keys before you can use it to trap them,
- and since the Cathedral is a Grand magecraft it can't be used repeatedly in quick succession.
+ and since the Cathedral is Grand magecraft it can't be used repeatedly in quick succession.
 }
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script/Ciel/Day 10/10_01_CIEL10_4_2B.txt

@@ -23,7 +23,7 @@ What were those weapons you were throwing around left and right, Ciel-senpai?"
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 -- 「そこに目を付けるとは、さすが遠野くん。
-"So they caught your attention, did they.
+"So they caught your attention, did they?
  You have a discerning eye, Tohno-kun.
 }
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@@ -36,7 +36,8 @@ Ultimate moves have their place,
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 -- いいでしょう。黒鍵について、エキスパートと言われた<私|・>がお教えします」
 // EKISSPAATO
-Listen closely. I, often described as an expert on Black Keys, will bestow upon you an explanation."
+Listen closely.
+ I, often described as an expert on Black Keys, will grace you with an explanation."
 }
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@@ -64,7 +65,7 @@ Heretics bearing the curse of immortality: Dead Apostles.
 -- その肉体を人間に戻す―――正しく死体に戻し、塵に返す事が教会の使命でした。
 The Church's mission was to revert their bodies back to being human――
 or more accurately, to being corpses――
-and to return them to dust.
+and as such, return them to dust.
 }
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@@ -94,7 +95,7 @@ Sacraments of the Church, created with the lament for the dead——litanies—
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 -- 日本風に言うと、そうですね……ありがたいお経と思ってください」
 // Thanks for the localisation
-If I had to transpose it to a Japanese context, maybe... Yes, think of it like a sutra of thankfulness."
+If I had to transpose it to a Japanese context, maybe... Yes, think of it like a sacred sutra."
 }
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@@ -252,7 +253,7 @@ During combat, we fill the handle with magica――%{i}cough%{/i}, prayers, at w
 -- 「九世紀頃、黒鍵は今のカタチに落ち着き、もっとも優れた聖典武装として広く愛用されました。
 "Around the ninth century,
  the Black Key settled into its current form,
- and were widely used, beloved as the greatest Scriptural Weapon of all.
+ and was widely used, beloved as the greatest Scriptural Weapon of all.
 }
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@@ -317,7 +318,7 @@ As civilization developed and the mass production of guns became widespread, the
 "Their popularity briefly recovered with the emergence of the Gutenberg press in 1450,
  but they couldn't compete with the convenience of firearms.
  Black keys went from being go-to weapons to an afterthought,
- something you'd carry as a good-luck charm if you were in the know.
+ a fashion accessory for those wishing to cultivate their image.
 }
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